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Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 15:39
by oprayx73
Byond ID: Oprayx73

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
Boris Bourbon, or Abraham the Synthetic

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name):
Cuthun Dak'te
Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?
I'm familiar with it very much, especially when saltrines lecture on it..

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
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First Hunt
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[Some extra personality and story is in here for anyone who'd like.]
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How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?
As in the story, Cuth'un is more brutish than your average yautja, and a complete bully.
Although from humble beginnings, he's acquired a disdain for pompous high-bred yautja, and clashes with them infrequently.
He will gladly greet unsurmounting strength and power, even when the battle is uphill. He believes in
his inner tenacity and willpower, therefore it wouldn't be overly rare to see him biting more than he can chew.
For this, he is aggressive when he needs to be even to a target too great, or weither that target is his own companions.
(He'll often have disagreements with others and bully them for it, but he'd never even come close to breaking the honor code. He will always "kill honorably or die honorably.")

Why should we whitelist you?
I'm a player with a good, solid lengthy history, and have been with the community and server for a while.
I've been examining predator play and engaging in RP along with whitelisted players and had a blast,
and been able to provide those experiences and my quirky,synthetic means. I wish to bring that to the
players through a cunning and deadly predator form, who bullies his opponents and apparent allies.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
No.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
No, i am not banned on any other servers.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?
I fully agree with and understand this policy.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 15:52
by Kneez
+1, I've had numerous fantastic encounters with Oprayx73 and I think his application is awesome. I'd love to see you on the hunt.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 16:15
by JKincaid
You have always been a solid player, you rp very well as Abraham and you're pretty competent as marine.

The app is pretty interesting, I feel like some parts could have been refined a bit or better communicated, but the same can be said for my own app.

Overall you put a lot of care into this to make something unique, I will say that being a bully is one thing, but probably try not to start fights with any other preds playing unless it's for good reason. This is one part of your character I don't think could be implemented too extremely well in most rounds, but just because I think that doesn't mean you can't work some magic to make it well... work.

Overall I've had good experiences with Abraham, and I know you can perform well in the role, so I'm going to support this app. +1

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 16:25
by oprayx73
JKincaid wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 16:15
You have always been a solid player, you rp very well as Abraham and you're pretty competent as marine.

The app is pretty interesting, I feel like some parts could have been refined a bit or better communicated, but the same can be said for my own app.

Overall you put a lot of care into this to make something unique, I will say that being a bully is one thing, but probably try not to start fights with any other preds playing unless it's for good reason. This is one part of your character I don't think could be implemented too extremely well in most rounds, but just because I think that doesn't mean you can't work some magic to make it well... work.

Overall I've had good experiences with Abraham, and I know you can perform well in the role, so I'm going to support this app. +1
Kneez wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 15:52
+1, I've had numerous fantastic encounters with Oprayx73 and I think his application is awesome. I'd love to see you on the hunt.

I appreciate all of the support, thank you so much :)

The playstyle will not cause any problems without warrant. OOCly, i'm not going to try and cause trouble. ICly, Cuthun knows his boundaries and won't go over them.
I know I can manage to craft a meaningful & well thought out experience with this character archetype when done correctly.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 16:26
by Robotic Potato
Had a lot of good encounters with you, shame I don't see you a lot probably just down to my terrible sleeping schedule.

App was nice, as Kincaid said it could use refinement, but the small flaws don't detract from the overall story. I'm sure you can have some conflict with the other pred players without downright having to fight and it's not like we're not up for a little fighting, fighting with each other now and again.

+1

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:03
by NethIafins
+1

Liked the app, solid story, especially compared to the other ones. Quirk you stated is pretty rare since most of the time predators go buddy-bud round start. I like it and can't wait to see this playstyle in-game.

I do have one question which won't change my +1. Question is, what you will do with marines? Ignore? Toy with them? Cooperate? Something else? I didn't find any specifications about your interaction with humans

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:13
by oprayx73
Robotic Potato wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 16:26
Had a lot of good encounters with you, shame I don't see you a lot probably just down to my terrible sleeping schedule.

App was nice, as Kincaid said it could use refinement, but the small flaws don't detract from the overall story. I'm sure you can have some conflict with the other pred players without downright having to fight and it's not like we're not up for a little fighting, fighting with each other now and again.

+1
NethIafins wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 17:03
+1

Liked the app, solid story, especially compared to the other ones. Quirk you stated is pretty rare since most of the time predators go buddy-bud round start. I like it and can't wait to see this playstyle in-game.

I do have one question which won't change my +1. Question is, what you will do with marines? Ignore? Toy with them? Cooperate? Something else? I didn't find any specifications about your interaction with humans
:thumbup: Thanks so much guys for the support and good critical analysis. I'm a east coaster who gets on sometimes quite early, might explain why. :D

As to marine interaction, they will be another whelp for Cuthun to take advantage of. He will berate and harass those weaker than him physically and psychologically, regardless of their species
(a bit of an exception is other yautja who truly outmatch him, in real status, strength and skill)

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:32
by forwardslashN
I am familiar with you, and your application is generally passable enough for a long standing member, though not particularly great. However, the extra bit of story at the end doesn't really show a good understanding of Yautja society, and in fact, I think it's very, very poorly thought out.

Killing an elder of a clan in cold blood, fleeing the scene, and nothing being done about it is downright silly.

Killing another Yautja in cold blood is about the highest crime someone can commit, that I am aware of. Killing an elder of a clan, a very high-ranking member in Yautja society, would have severe consequences, not just for the killer, but the clan he or she belongs to. Listing it as an accident, that the elder was killed in cold blood, is also very hard to believe. The fact that Cuthun didn't do anything about it just shows him as dishonorable, and he would no-doubt be questioned incessantly about the incident. I don't think I can upvote your application as it is. -1

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:38
by oprayx73
forwardslashN wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 17:32
I am familiar with you, and your application is generally passable enough for a long standing member, though not particularly great. However, the extra bit of story at the end doesn't really show a good understanding of Yautja society, and in fact, I think it's very, very poorly thought out.

Killing an elder of a clan in cold blood, fleeing the scene, and nothing being done about it is downright silly.

Killing another Yautja in cold blood is about the highest crime someone can commit, that I am aware of. Killing an elder of a clan, a very high-ranking member in Yautja society, would have severe consequences, not just for the killer, but the clan he or she belongs to. Listing it as an accident, that the elder was killed in cold blood, is also very hard to believe. The fact that Cuthun didn't do anything about it just shows him as dishonorable, and he would no-doubt be questioned incessantly about the incident. I don't think I can upvote your application as it is. -1
I think you had a misunderstanding. Cuthun didn't kill anyone, that was him witnessing someone from a foreign clan murdering his elder. I'm sorry it's not too clear.
Theres some context tossed in showing how the stranger threatens him never to tell anyone, and that "he overhears their arguement" , "when he had entered it was already too late"

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:44
by forwardslashN
oprayx73 wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 17:38
I think you had a misunderstanding. Cuthun didn't kill anyone, that was him witnessing someone from a foreign clan murdering his elder. I'm sorry it's not too clear.
No misunderstanding there. I am talking about the noble who killed the elder, not Cuthun. Cuthun stood by and didn't do anything as the noble fled. The thing was thought to be an accident. I just find it all unbelievable.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:45
by oprayx73
forwardslashN wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 17:44
No misunderstanding there. I am talking about the noble who killed the elder, not Cuthun. Cuthun stood by and didn't do anything as the noble fled. The thing was thought to be an accident. I just find it all unbelievable.
I agree it's properly inadequate to chalk up an important member of their clan's passing as an accident. Possibly if i changed their status to something lower, it'd be much more reasonable.
I'll simply have to say it's not a terribly key part of this application and just an aside.

In future, this altercation would have been between a foreign clan member and one of Cuthun's mentors who taught him how to work.
Cuthun was still quite young, and held the status of a modern day minimum wage earner. Being intimidated, that's why he never came forward or gave any chase.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:56
by forwardslashN
oprayx73 wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 17:45
I agree it's properly inadequate to chalk up an important member of their clan's passing as an accident. Possibly if i changed their status to something lower, it'd be much more reasonable.
I'll simply have to say it's not a terribly key part of this application and just an aside.

In future, this altercation would have been between a foreign clan member and one of Cuthun's mentors who taught him how to work.
Cuthun was still quite young, and held the status of a modern day minimum wage earner. Being intimidated, that's why he never came forward or gave any chase.
I think it would have been preferable to change the situation to something else entirely, something that doesn't paint Cuthun in a negative light (he stood by as the killer fled, afraid to intervene. That just shows him to be unwilling to act, and kind of a coward). Perhaps if he saw the noble threatening his elder, and came to intervene before an altercation took place, I think that would paint him in a much better light. It would still give him a reason to be spiteful of the nobility--the noble was probably bluffing, but the elder would certainly appreciate Cuthun's initiative.

At least you are open to discussion, so best of luck to you.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 08 Jan 2018, 17:58
by oprayx73
forwardslashN wrote:
08 Jan 2018, 17:56
I think it would have been preferable to change the situation to something else entirely, something that doesn't paint Cuthun in a negative light (he stood by as the killer fled, afraid to intervene. That just shows him to be unwilling to act, and kind of a coward). Perhaps if he saw the noble threatening his elder, and came to intervene before an altercation took place, I think that would paint him in a much better light. It would still give him a reason to be spiteful of the nobility--the noble was probably bluffing, but the elder would certainly appreciate Cuthun's initiative.

At least you are open to discussion, so best of luck to you.
Could use some tune on the personality in that small story, to be consistent with the rest. Thanks for all the input and honesty. :D

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 09 Jan 2018, 21:10
by Jakkkk
After reading your story, I would say it paints a good portrait of your Predator. Once afraid to interfere and protect the elder, now attempts to redeem himself through feats of strength and aggressiveness. I have no gripes with this story, and would like to encounter him while playing CM. I also appreciate the insight to the Yautja social standings affecting your playstyle, it would be a cool interraction to meet a Yautja of high born status, then you two knock heads. This has my definite +1, and I wish you luck.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 10 Jan 2018, 14:38
by ParadoxSpace
I've had good experiences with Oprayx, and I love the personality this Predator could bring to Hunts. +1

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 10 Jan 2018, 21:21
by oprayx73
ParadoxSpace wrote:
10 Jan 2018, 14:38
I've had good experiences with Oprayx, and I love the personality this Predator could bring to Hunts. +1
Jakkkk wrote:
09 Jan 2018, 21:10
After reading your story, I would say it paints a good portrait of your Predator. Once afraid to interfere and protect the elder, now attempts to redeem himself through feats of strength and aggressiveness. I have no gripes with this story, and would like to encounter him while playing CM. I also appreciate the insight to the Yautja social standings affecting your playstyle, it would be a cool interraction to meet a Yautja of high born status, then you two knock heads. This has my definite +1, and I wish you luck.

I want to thank you two and everyone who has given input, negative or positive. I definitely admire Ikthya-de alot. I appreciate every look into what my predator has to offer.
Thank you so much! :D

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 11 Jan 2018, 13:07
by Symbiosis
Player is good, the app is acceptable (barring the point Noize made), and I'll give me +1. Especially considering his response to Noize. His responses indicate the right kind of temperament for the whitelist.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 11 Jan 2018, 20:20
by JKincaid
Been thinking on what /N brought up for a while, I'm deciding not to change my stance, I'll still support the app.

I didn't catch that detail, but to put it in terms a broader range of people would likely understand, what happens between Cuthun and the assassin.

Cuthun not assisting the elder at this time, and being so fearful during a critical moment to not act would not really be 'bad blood' territory, but I feel that if his clan learned of his inability to act, he would be treated like one... an outcast.

/N Would likely have more resources to draw upon than I do, but there's not a ton of pred lore available to get a full understanding on the inner workings of their society. I personally think that a race that has such strong tracts in honor and personal strength would likely look upon Cuthun with the utmost vitriol in this situation. It would severely limit many things in his life and make it hard for him to get any chances to gain that honor back, save for taking the head of the Yautja that slew the Elder or possibly a honorable suicide. (If /N has thoughts on that I'd like to hear them.)

I think you have the ability to play a good pred, I just feel this is a pretty big part of the backstory that needed to be more thoroughly examined.

Stay frosty my friend.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 11 Jan 2018, 21:41
by oprayx73
JKincaid wrote:
11 Jan 2018, 20:20
Been thinking on what /N brought up for a while, I'm deciding not to change my stance, I'll still support the app.

I didn't catch that detail, but to put it in terms a broader range of people would likely understand, what happens between Cuthun and the assassin.

Cuthun not assisting the elder at this time, and being so fearful during a critical moment to not act would not really be 'bad blood' territory, but I feel that if his clan learned of his inability to act, he would be treated like one... an outcast.

/N Would likely have more resources to draw upon than I do, but there's not a ton of pred lore available to get a full understanding on the inner workings of their society. I personally think that a race that has such strong tracts in honor and personal strength would likely look upon Cuthun with the utmost vitriol in this situation. It would severely limit many things in his life and make it hard for him to get any chances to gain that honor back, save for taking the head of the Yautja that slew the Elder or possibly a honorable suicide. (If /N has thoughts on that I'd like to hear them.)

I think you have the ability to play a good pred, I just feel this is a pretty big part of the backstory that needed to be more thoroughly examined.

Stay frosty my friend.
I agree that the little add-on side story needs a lookover to improve too. My thought process when writing that aside was that he was such a young and lowly
yautja that he had not the will to pursue someone of such greater strength, skill & status than him. Here's a little retconned version i've been working on.

Youngling
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Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 12 Jan 2018, 17:48
by Heckenshutze
Overall, very nice application.

Good player, and since he's a synth he surely can RP at the level that is is requested.

+1

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 12 Jan 2018, 19:16
by oprayx73
Symbiosis wrote:
11 Jan 2018, 13:07
Player is good, the app is acceptable (barring the point Noize made), and I'll give me +1. Especially considering his response to Noize. His responses indicate the right kind of temperament for the whitelist.
Heckenshutze wrote:
12 Jan 2018, 17:48
Overall, very nice application.

Good player, and since he's a synth he surely can RP at the level that is is requested.

+1
:thumbup: gotta hand it to all the people supporting my application and looking at it with critical analysis. thanks to every one of you who replied so far :)

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 12 Jan 2018, 20:17
by NescauComToddy
As much as I currently have an active application and I do not like to make reviews of others while I am applying, besides Opray's application being good, he is also a good player, being 'Abraham' a memorable name in my mind.

Honestly, I've noticed the controversial part of Cuthun's background, and I agree with what both N and JK said, but still, I know the applicant here is a good player in general and therefore, I will ignore this error of yours in the app. The method you are planning to play is interesting, and I believe it can provide decent moments to other whitelisted players, should you be accepted. Although the way in which you intend to interact with marines is generic. As much as I believe some parts of your app could have been better and more detailed, I know that you are able to meet the requirements to be whitelisted.

I believe that everything that had to be said has already been said. I hope both of us, can join the hunt in the near future.

1+

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 12 Jan 2018, 20:27
by forwardslashN
JKincaid wrote:
11 Jan 2018, 20:20
/N Would likely have more resources to draw upon than I do, but there's not a ton of pred lore available to get a full understanding on the inner workings of their society.
I haven't read everything about predators out there, but from what I know, most of their society inner workings come from comic material. The expanded universe, which is kind of all-over the place.
JKincaid wrote:
11 Jan 2018, 20:20
I personally think that a race that has such strong tracts in honor and personal strength would likely look upon Cuthun with the utmost vitriol in this situation. It would severely limit many things in his life and make it hard for him to get any chances to gain that honor back, save for taking the head of the Yautja that slew the Elder or possibly a honorable suicide.
I think about the same.

I read the updated bit, and I don't have a problem with it. Seems pretty straightforward and acceptable. If that part is changed, I'm fine with the rest of it, but that depends on whether or not Feweh wants to allow it.

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 14 Jan 2018, 21:10
by DeusMortis
Oprayx's one of the more memorable guys in my book and for good reason. He's a solid rper and the first Synth player that comes to mind when I think 'Synthetic'. Cuthun himself is a unique Predator among the bunch and Oprayx manages to write the backstory well without straying off topic.

He's got my +1

Re: Cuthun Dak'te - Oprayx73

Posted: 14 Jan 2018, 21:53
by taketheshot56
Fuck no dont advertise -1.
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