The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II

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The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II

Post by shyshadow » 19 Nov 2017, 01:10

Holy shit, I finally did it. I'm sorry for the long as fuck wait. I've just been like putting off for so long. So please I hope you enjoy it, and don't be discouraged by the google doc. It just looks better than white on black. Black on white looks a LOT easier to read. If you haven't read the last 2 chapters, please go read them before reading this one.


Introduction

Chapter I

Now here's the google document: The Lost Cemetary: Chapter II

I really hope you liked it guys. I worked for like a total of 12 hours on it, sooo ehhh. Anyway, please give your thoughts and opinion on it. In the section below....
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Post by TehSpoderman » 19 Nov 2017, 01:20

haha wee
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II

Post by Karmac » 19 Nov 2017, 02:27

Just as fun to read as the first chapter, lookin' good so far.
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II

Post by shyshadow » 19 Nov 2017, 02:59

TehSpoderman wrote:
19 Nov 2017, 01:20
haha wee
I'm laughing at this and I don't know why. It's just so silly. Hopefully it means you like it.
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II

Post by TehSpoderman » 19 Nov 2017, 03:35

shyshadow wrote:
19 Nov 2017, 02:59
I'm laughing at this and I don't know why. It's just so silly. Hopefully it means you like it.
yee haha wee
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II

Post by Nezara » 20 Nov 2017, 06:52

your writing style needs some work, Iv added some feedback to your document.


Good idea, nice concepts....dialogue needs some heavy work and your understanding of certain behaviours in certain contexts needs more thought.

Keep practicing. :)

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