Muffin's synthetic application.

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Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by Sargeantmuffinman » 10 Feb 2018, 13:42

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Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Aiden Newton.

Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use: Brooke.

Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines (viewtopic.php?f=57&t=14417)?

Yes

Synthetic Character Story (An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission onboard the Almayer):
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How do you intend to play your Synth (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your Synth and what support roles you’ll mainly focus on, what is your synthetics quirk)?

My synthetic is a practicalist. He intends to accomplish the objective in the safest, logical manner possible but he will take risks if and when it's needed to accomplish any goals his supperiors have ordered him to do.
I intend to play a multi-purpose role to help the marines in any way possible.

How familiar are you with support roles? (ie; Medical, MT, Science, SO)

I'm a jack of all trades. I've played most roles regarding Medical, engineering, and leadership. I've a broad and sophisticated knowledge on how most machines and objects in CM work.
I think I've the capabilites to aid the marines and provide a roleplay opportunity when presented with one.

Why should we whitelist you?

I do enjoy roleplay and I think my diverse skill set can help the marines when there is no personnel available, I will fill in for them.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?

Nope.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?

Nope.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline?

I understand fully.
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I don't like cute things.

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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by Nicboone » 10 Feb 2018, 13:48

+1. nmeed more femsynths. Also, player did well in previous events I had hosted.
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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by Solarmare » 27 Feb 2018, 21:31

I'll give my +1, muffin is good and I think they should manage to carry out being a synthetic faithfully.

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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by edda » 03 Mar 2018, 00:49

Boring quirk and never interacted with your character, but I've followed you as ghost before and you've always impressed me with your gameplay. +1 from me.
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Post by adralimas » 04 Mar 2018, 00:58

+1 from me!
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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by Wubs4Scrubs » 09 Mar 2018, 20:16

Your quirk is really not quirky in the slightest.
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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by Sargeantmuffinman » 10 Mar 2018, 06:44

I know the quirk isn't good, I had no idea what to have it as, until a few days after I posted the app, I thought of something probably worse or better.
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I don't like cute things.

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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by Heckenshutze » 13 Mar 2018, 10:36

Quirk can be fixed in-game and isn't really THAT important, I'm pretty sure as an old player, mentor and active member of the community he can play the role has intended, even better.

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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by NGGJamie » 17 Mar 2018, 04:54

More feedback required.
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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by nerocavalier » 02 Apr 2018, 15:14

My only nitpick is that I can see how your character would act but no idea how they looks. It might not matter that much, but I'd like to see if they're perpetually neutral, slightly smiling, or so on. A little detail on their appearance would make this perfect.

The story feels clinical and detached which is fair seeing how your synth is supposed to be pragmatic and practical. Coming from the player standpoint, I genuinely believe that you can play your synth in the way you said you would.

+1 and I hope you get the whitelist.
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Re: Muffin's synthetic application.

Post by NGGJamie » 17 Apr 2018, 09:07

Denied due to lack of feedback.

Reading through your backstory, the biggest improvement I could suggest for a new application would be to integrate your dialogue more smoothly into the narrative. While your format does make it clear who is speaking at all times, placing all of your dialogue in a single block where nothing else is described to be happening makes the reader feel like time has frozen, and everyone is just waiting for the characters to stop talking before everything resumes. You also do not provide descriptions of anything in your writing. While a film or video can give all the necessary description by being a visual medium, in writing the only things that exist are the things you describe. Anything you do not describe, the reader is forced to fill in themselves. In this case, the reader has nothing to go off of other than the fact your synth is female, and there's a squad of marines in some kind of AO. In my own reading, I imagined a jungle scenario because that is most common, even though you may have intended something else for your colony.

To more minor issue, the Commander should probably know the capabilities of his own Synthetic unit rather than trying to give a purely non-combat entity a gun and shoo them off into the AO. I think this could have been made to work better in your writing if you did want to emphasize the Commander isn't knowledgeable about Synthetics.
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